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PostPosted: Mon Feb 12, 2018 9:26 am 
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Hello! I've created my first-ever interactive horror game in Harlowe Twine and would be very grateful for beta testers on desktops/mobiles.

It's a short ten-minute game with multiple endings.

Many thanks in advance.

Dolores and the Cave is online freeware and can be played here:

https://www.mookychick.co.uk/dolores-and-the-cave.php


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PostPosted: Tue Mar 13, 2018 8:00 am 
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Hi! I played through "Dolores and the Cave", the premise was interesting. Here are my notes:

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Typos:
I'm injured. I need to stabalise my wounds...
stabalise = stabilize

A index finger is worth something
a=an

Text:
Chris, their name was. They had always been so kind to you.
They should be he or she, Misery knows Chris' sex. Using "they" as a singular pronoun also sounds jarring to readers.

Gameplay:

There should be more names given to the player during the adventure as red herrings for Misery's identity, it's too obvious even if one isn't following the plot.
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I hope that this is useful to you! I enjoyed your game.

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PostPosted: Tue Mar 13, 2018 8:21 am 
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Hi, that's so helpful of you, thank you very much for taking the time to play!


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My pleasure :)

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